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clear water swirled with sepia
sticking to a sandy, squared floor
so sloppy, slippery.
that old winter water on wet winter days.
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Love the alliteration! :D
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TheMitmit Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Student Writer
This manages to communicate what winter is like even to those who don't have snow and ice. I grew up in LA, and can remember what it's like not to have winter. The sounds of the words, especially the last line, are very evocative of what you're describing. I like it, it's simple and elegant. 
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doodlerTM Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I appreciate your insightful comment. :)
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TheMitmit Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Student Writer
You're very welcome!
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